Fic issues

[tuxedo_elf]

Chapter 9 of Silent Song is written - but I don't know, I'm just not happy with it and I can't figure out why.
Anyone want to read it over and tell me where I'm going wrong?

*Hugs*
Tux

Comments

[say-aye.livejournal.com]

LOL Hahaha, nope, you didn’t! I like it slow too! ^x^ <3 <3 <3