Fic issues

[tuxedo_elf]

Chapter 9 of Silent Song is written - but I don't know, I'm just not happy with it and I can't figure out why.
Anyone want to read it over and tell me where I'm going wrong?

*Hugs*
Tux

Comments

[tuxedo-elf.livejournal.com]

*Giggles* In a day or so, yes! Once I've fixed whatever it is that's wrong!

*Hugs and snogs*

[say-aye.livejournal.com]

Heehee ~waits waits waits~ ;D