Fic issues

[tuxedo_elf]

Chapter 9 of Silent Song is written - but I don't know, I'm just not happy with it and I can't figure out why.
Anyone want to read it over and tell me where I'm going wrong?

*Hugs*
Tux

Comments

[punisher8209.livejournal.com]

*raises hand*

Not that I would be any help with grammer and such, but I do have an eye for plot...

[tuxedo-elf.livejournal.com]

That's cool! I'm not too worried about grammer right now, I can fix any glitches myself, it's the content that concerns me! :)